Ced23Ric wrote:War never changes.
The Trilobite wrote:I meant a separate line for dialogue from each character. Like:
The weapon shook in Jeremy's fist. His eyes stared at Wilson, feverish in a face as pale as an index card. "Stay back! I know what you are! I know what you are!" His voice rose to a shriek, and his face contorted wildly.
"Now, Jeremy, let's...let's try to stay calm here. We can discuss this rationally." Wilson walked forward, slowly. His voice was low and calm, and he watched, not the gun, but Jeremy's widening eyes.
Joshua A.C. Newman wrote:You guys can take my editorial comment in whatever way you like. This is it:
"Trite and boring."
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