Testing the Mettle - Feedback

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Testing the Mettle - Feedback

Postby spacemonkey » Mon Sep 16, 2013 1:46 pm

This is really well done, Kaiser197. The story has good pacing so far and you've got a nice handle on the personalities and view points of the various factions. Spotted a couple minor typos, but overall it is very well written and I look forward to seeing the next chapter. :)
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Re: Testing the Mettle - Feedback

Postby Kaiser1917 » Mon Sep 16, 2013 10:50 pm

Thanks Space. I read Mantisking's blog post this morning, about how no one talks about anything beyond their frame designs, and decided I should post this thing I'd been kicking around for a while. In my head I have a very robust and vibrant universe for MFZ. I'd like to see more people writing more stories and more planet/system overviews/faction descriptions/local histories for the game. Maybe in some way tie them together, beyond the common setting.
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Re: Testing the Mettle - Feedback

Postby Red_Robot » Sat Sep 21, 2013 7:49 am

This is a really good "slice of life" piece about an embattled colony in the Solar Calendar. It lets us into the heads of characters fighting for differing reasons in a single theater of war. I hope there are more chapters to follow.
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Re: Testing the Mettle - Feedback

Postby Kaiser1917 » Sat Sep 21, 2013 12:53 pm

Thanks.
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Re: Testing the Mettle - Feedback

Postby spacemonkey » Sat Sep 21, 2013 4:18 pm

Great part 2. Good characterizations and nice battle flow.

I am a little curious why you decided to post it in a new thread instead of keeping the story together? :?:
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